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Original Query Letter   Dear (Agent):   As heir to the Shadow Realms, sixteen-year-old Bramlyn Shadowborne should excel at lies and have a talent for evil; but with the simple Gift of Healing, Bram is forced to concede her throne … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Dear [Ms./Mr. Agent Name];   For sixteen-year-old Lilly, life unfolds according to God’s Plan. But after befriending Parker at a New Year’s Eve party, his insight into free will causes Lilly to rediscover who’s really in … Continue reading

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Before we get started I want to point out that this query is for a memoir—it is hella awkward to critique a query for a memoir. This is stuff that actually happened! How can I critique what an author has … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Dear ( Literary Agent)   This is the story of what happens when love comes between friends and friends become enemies in the battle to achieve your dreams….   Roxy Carson is 15, a sprinter and … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Dear Agent:   A series of what appear to be brutal animal attacks have beset the small Oregon town of Silver Falls, and sixteen-year-old resident Toby Hoffman is almost grateful for the carnage. While upset about … Continue reading

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I’m beginning to be really offended that I don’t have time to check my email, blog, and twitter from work. Like, what is this? Some sort of Intensive Care?     Original Query Letter   Dear Agent,   When a … Continue reading

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Work this weekend has been…just ugh. Nuff said.   Original Query Letter   Dear Ms. Smith,   Andover Pierce just celebrated his seventeenth birthday. Andy should be shooting free-throws. Going to prom. Chasing girls. Instead, his time has come to … Continue reading

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  It’s that time, y’all!   Original Query Letter   Dear Agent:   Young witch Gemma Morrin’s life takes a dangerous twist when a member of her ancestral coven asks her to hide a powerful grimoire. The book holds secrets … Continue reading

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As promised, for your reading enjoyment, the recipe query letter, Round 2…. For those who are interested, here is the first attempt.   Original Query Letter   Dear [Literary Agent],   Superpowers had not changed the one thing Jimmy Ranfaz hated; … Continue reading

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  Apologies in advance to any readers who aren’t into numerous query critiques in the span of two week’s time, but I love them, and there are just so many! Plus, who’d want to have to wait weeks upon weeks … Continue reading

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Drowning…in…query…letters…can’t…come up…for air…   Seriously though, I’m thrilled/amazed/humbled that so many people would be interested in my thoughts on their query letters! Keep ‘em coming!     Original Query Letter   Dear [Agent]:            Emma Harris is tired of … Continue reading

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Query letters arriving in droves this week! Jumping right in… Original Query Letter Dear [Literary Agent], I present to you a recipe for a 90,000 word high fantasy YA novel with a scientific flavour named EVOLUTION: THREADS OF CONTROL. Ingredients: … Continue reading

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It’s that time again, folks. Another author has been kind/brave enough to offer me up her query letter for public critique. I’m not in the mood for longwinded introductions, so let’s get right to it, shall we? Original Query Letter … Continue reading

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It’s been way too long since I last got my hands on a query letter, and I almost forgot how much fun they are to rip apart critique. Having said that, my apologies in advance to the wonderful author who … Continue reading

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It’s that time again y’all!   This week’s query was so nicely done I was hard pressed to find things to pick at. Alas I did find a few things…and then got carried away as usual. But it was very … Continue reading

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It’s that time again for another query letter critique! I’m really happy to say that this week’s query is another fabulously written letter, which I’m honored to take a look at J Reminder: My comments are subjective and someone else may … Continue reading

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