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Born with voracious hunger, Jin has eaten his family out of house and home. But no matter what he devours, his hunger remains. Until he meets the Kitchen God, in his home in the Yandang Mountains. Impressed with Jin’s unearthly … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Nineteen-year-old Blake wakes up on a generation ship in deep space, except it’s not the virtual reality game he thought he was testing. He wasn’t a beta-tester, but a guinea pig. It’s not a game, but … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   CHOOSE YOUR OWN APOCALYPSE, is an 88,000 word work of women’s fiction. I would be delighted if you’d take a look at it.   When futurist scholar Glory Roberts joins a group of doomsday preppers, they … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Nikki Evers assumed the crimes were random coincidences. Fires on campus. Convenient store robberies. Gang killings. Great stories for the school paper. But when her best friend Brycin disappears, presumed dead, and she gets a text … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Dear Agent:   Seventeen-year-old Sadie knows her sister is dead.   Her mama sees the silver lining on the letter reading “missing in action”, but Sadie knows the truth: Skylar isn’t coming back.   They say … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   This isn’t Quinn Dempsey’s first dead body—hell, it’s not even her first cannibalized one. She and her partner are Orions, hunters and contract sorcerers trained and employed by the top secret Orion Council, and they see … Continue reading

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As many of you may already know (because I won’t shut up about it already, seriously), this year’s Christmas in July pitch contest was a huge success. The 30 winning entries featured on our blogs, chosen from over 200 submissions, … Continue reading

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ORIGINAL QUERY LETTER   Title: The New Eden Chronicles   Dear Agent X:   Four hundred years after environmental collapse, there’s no place on Earth as beautiful as New Eden, where The Council of Holy Elders guards the secret to … Continue reading

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I love doing query letter critiques, but lately I’ve noticed that I often give out the same bit of advice, which leads me to believe that maybe a whole blog post dedicated to this bit of advice is in order. … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Dear Agent, (do not know specific one yet- Sorry!)   Rosemary Bell, a grieving young widow, lost her husband to cancer and gives up her prestigious life as an artist. She moves to Pleasant Bay to mourn … Continue reading

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Skeletons are claustrophic – if you shut them up in a closet they’re going to get out. This could be just me but I don’t really love this hook. It’s vague and tells nothing about the story to come. Also, … Continue reading

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Dear Agent,   Surviving on her own comes naturally to sixteen-year-old Evangeline comma whether it’s squatting in vacant apartments, crashing on Charlie’s couch, or sleeping in a nearby tree. It has to be. If she’s not careful comma Evy will … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Urban Fantasy, Adult.   Kylie Rippons carries a unique skill the gods want to use in their wars – no matter the personal cost. She, however, prefers to keep soul and sanity in tact.   Kylie … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Dear (Mr./Mrs. Agent Name)   Andrea Smith and her friends learn that they have fallen into a killer’s trap. It all begins with a prank on a classmate that goes entirely wrong.   As if the prank … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Jimmy Rickliefs’ rock star career ends when a drunk driver runs a red light.   In the wake of the near-fatal accident, Jimmy’s shattered body can’t keep up with his job. Permanent injuries from the accident … Continue reading

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Original Query Letter   Dear Agent XXXXXX,   Seventeen-year-old Enne Alfero roams the shadow world of Ombra looking for her lost mother and fleeing from the city’s politicians who want her dead. With Ombra’s gang-infested streets, rusted horse-drawn carriages, and … Continue reading

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